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To Look and be Foun ch 6 Chapter 6
Planning

Roxas and Axel immediately agreed to go, both as eager as you were, or so Riku says. They were supposed to come over at 5:30 am exactly, but Riku said not to expect them until six, because they were lazy and had been known to do that before. Riku had also taken forever getting back, but he returned after about two hours and when he got back you say what had taken him so long.

Riku came in through the door, you breathed a sigh of relief and jumped up to meet him. You engulfed him in a bone-crushing hug, your worry melting away. He hugged you back, seeming to know how much you had worried. Finally though you had to let go
To Look and be Found Ch. 5 Chapter 5:The morning after

You awoke slowly. The first thing you noticed was the warmth. Second was that there was someone stroking your hair. You groaned and tried to move, but there was a weight against you holding you still. You open your eyes and light shined right into your eyes, a brightness so great, it was like looking into the sun. You instantly close your eyes and put your hand over them, trying to rub some of the pain that the light had caused. You tentivly remove your hands and slowly raise your eyes. Everything was blurry, and eventually it cleared.
"Good morning" said Riku. His voice startled you, you had almost forgotten abo
To Look and be Found Ch4 Chapter 4: Haven turned to Hell

Riku's house was beautiful. It was huge like a mansion, but it also had that feeling like it had been lived in with a loving family. It had this aura of life love and family. Yet it was also empty, no family portraits or any signal that anyone had lived here before.
"Do you live alone here?" you ask
"Ya my parents are constantly traveling so I stay here by myself," he answered
You two hadn't said a word to each other on the way here ever since he kissed your forehead. But you didn't really want to talk you were so confused about what he meant by it in the first place.
"You'll stay up here," Riku said going
To Look and be Found Ch. 3 Chapter 3: Getting to know you

Riku was still holding your hand as he led you down the street, he wasn't dragging you, just pulling you gently along. Sora and Kairi were up ahead, holding hands and whispering to each other. You started to wonder if they were a couple, but they were to far ahead so you decided to ask Riku.
"Riku are they a couple?"
"Ya they got together last year," he said. He said it quickly, not looking at you while he said it. You wanted him to talk to you so you try a different tactic.
"How old are you?" He looked older than he had in the game, almost as old as yourself.
"I'm seventeen," came the curt reply. You were
To Look and be Found Ch. 2 Chapter 2: The Meeting

"So the last thing you remember is going to sleep?" asked Sora
"Yup," you said again, it seems like that's all you have been doing lately, answering their questions and not having time to ask any of your own.
"Now tell me, how did you find me and what am I doing here?"
"Well we were just going home from the islands," started off Kairi, "when this huge wave crashed into the shore."
"Ya, we thought you were driftwood a first," butted-in Sora.
"Anyway," said Kairi, throwing Sora an annoyed look, "as soon as we realized that it was a person, we rushed over but you had passed out. So we couldn't just leave you there,

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Beauty and the Beast

by =Dark-Moon-Forever

Long ago lived a callous prince
who cared for no one but himself.
One day an old woman asked for shelter,
and the prince slammed the door in her face.

Suddenly the woman revealed
that she was really a beautiful witch.
She put a curse on the prince
they he his outside would reflect his inside.

Until you find someone to love
and to be loved in return
you will remain a beast
for the rest of your days.


I was seventeen when my father
set out to find his fortune.

When he returned
He told me of his travels.

He said that he made a grave mistake
and that I would have to go and live with a beast

I complied,
Because it was for my papa.

When the old man said
he had a daughter
I didn' think she would be so beautiful

No one could ever love
someone as horrendous
as a beast like me.

I shouldn't even try.
She's just my prisoner
and nothing more

He's so shy,
and not nearly as bad as he thinks

Under those looks
is a heart made of gold.

Truly, I wish
he would let me in

She's so kind
how can she stand
a beast like me?

She doesn't flinch
at my touch
and she even looks me in the eye.

I want nothing more
than to let her in,
But will she love me as I love her?

I miss my family,
but I'm happy here.

I don't want to leave
yet I still feel unwelcome

I think soon though
He'll let me in.

It's been months now
and she's still here
maybe she'll stay.

I don't want her to leave
I can honestly say
I think I love her

Maybe one day
she'll be able
to love me to.

He's finally opening up
maybe he realizes that I like him.

No I don't like him
I love him

I can't keep her
locked up here
she needs to be free

He's letting me go
Maybe he doesn't love me

I love her

I love him

She can never love
a beast like me

Maybe I was wrong
He can't love a plain girl like me

Goodbye my love.

Goodbye my beast.
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Critique by =Willis-Crisp Mar 24, 2012, 2:45:03 AM
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I love the techniques you've used in this, the combination of the different people's views and story progression makes the poem engaging to read. I also like how the girl and the beast have separate stories which eventually merge together.

I've given you 4 and a half stars in originality because you've used bold, italics and underlining, which you don't often see despite it adds an entirely different element to the poem.

To improve, you could try improve it's rhythm a bit to make it easier to read. Not necessarily rhyming words but making the piece flow better.

Well done and thanks for submitting! :la:

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Critique by ~hallosse Feb 25, 2012, 6:00:05 PM
An interesting idea. I like how you framed the miscommunications in a relationship in a classic fairy tale. I would have used rhyming verse, but that's up to you. I think for blank verse, you did a pretty good job with making it flow like poetry should. The various view points were a little bit confusing, but I got used to it. I think you could have made it a bit longer, but sometimes that can be hard to do. I should know. :) A few more details would have made me more satisfied, but all in all, this is pretty good. Good job.
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your welcome i think anyone who did read it loved it!!!!
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Lovely poem. I like how you wrote this! Please keep up the good work! :D

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No problem! :love:

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When I started reading this I expected it to rhyme simply because most poems about fairytales rhyme. However - I think you pulled the free verse off and changed that tradition quite nicely :D I really like this piece!

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You are woman. You are man. You are woman,
so be kind,
be yourself,
be tough,
be smart,
be beautiful
all in your own way.

                        You are man
                        so be strong,
                        be protective,
           &You are woman. You are man. by =Dark-Moon-Forever
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Hardships Things had been hard lately for Terra and Vaan. They had been married a couple of years, and lately the pair had seemed to be drifting apart. Terra though, didn't want to think about that though, and whenever something happened that would reinforce the idea of their marriage being in jeopardy, Terra would force the thoughts to the back of her head. They were thoughts that lingered though, and refused to leave. Whatever Terra did, the hesitation and worry was still there haunting her. She had no idea if Vaan felt the same way as she did; it seemed to her like he was perfectly fine. Nothing seemed to bug him anymore about their marriage.

It waHardships by =Dark-Moon-Forever
Unplanned events With a new place, comes a new life. With a new apartment, Romano would try to make his place in the world away from his brother. In Italy he was always a part of his brother, always a shadow. Romano couldn't stand it anymore; he had to make an identity for himself. Back in Italy, no one knew who he was besides 'Feliciano's brother', or being the grump of the town. It was always Feli can paint, Feli can sing, Feli can do anything. He's so nice and sweet.

Even their Grandfather had favored Feliciano. What about Romano damn it?

No one had ever bothered to listen to Romano. No one had ever bothered to ask about Romano. No one knew that while RoUnplanned events by =Dark-Moon-Forever
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